To: T. Leoni, Manager, Personnel Department,
From: Donald Pryzbo, Manager, Data Processing Department
Subject: Incorrect Payroll Checks
Dear Mr. Leoni,
I went over the computer files again and I am sure these errors came from your department.
I am simply writing you to see if we can come up some way to eliminate these errors from occurring any longer. I know we discussed that my computer operators would start comparing against the time sheets but I believe we can fix this mistake before it enters my department.
I appreciate your time on this matter and hopefully we will have it resolved soon.
Thank You,
Donald Pryzblo, Manager, Data Processing Department
I changed a lot of things in the email. First off, I corrected the subject line by only capitalizing the first letter of each word because it was incorrectly laid out. Then I added the heading Dear Mr. Leoni, once I established to whom I was writing too. I fixed the body of the email. The email was written for the writer and not for the reader. What I mean is the writer wrote it in way in which the reader is simply going to delete the email. When you are writing a business email you do not want to make the reader mad. You want him or her to be persuaded towards what you are writing. Coming out and attacking the reader will not resolve anything. Attacking the reader and being a lunatic is just going to up badly. So I corrected the body of the email to make the reader sound perceptional. When writing makes sure that it is not something you will regret sending. After I corrected the body of the email, I made him sound more like a business man. Then I closed the email by saying “I appreciate your time on this matter and hopefully we will have it resolved soon”. I ended it like this to let the reader know that I was only wanting to help and resolve the problem. By closing it how I did, I believe the email would have a stronger impact. Lastly, I ended the email with a kind sentiment and the name the writer.
Sunday, September 26, 2010
Monday, September 13, 2010
Tourism and Hospitalty Management
While I was searching for schools that offer Tourism and Hospitality Management in the Southeast, I noticed one thing: there are very few schools in the southeast that offer a bachelors degree in Tourism and Hospitality management. I found The University of Southern Mississippi (http://www.usm.edu/undergraduate/tourism-casino-resort-management-bsba) and Florida International University (http://hospitality.fiu.edu/) to be the best schools in the southeast. The school I chose to do this project on is USM.
Florida International University seemed like it would be a great school to attend, as it is accredited and is one of the highest rated schools in America, also offering impressive ideas on how its hospitality and tourism management department is ran. While FIU offers these things, USM has a lot more to offer its students. FIU tuition for in state was $2,551 a semester and out of state tuition was $8,750. The prices for USM are not that much cheaper ($2,726 and out of state is $6,704), but the out of state tuition a Mississippi resident would have to pay to attend FIU is a much larger sum to pay.
If you are a resident of MS, USM would be the better choice, given the amount of out of state tuition one would pay to attend FIU. USM for a MS resident would be around $6000 cheaper than going out of state to FIU. FIU’s main focus is on the tourism/management of cruise ships and hotels, whereas USM focuses more on casinos and hotel management.
USM is a great school to attend if your main interest is on casino management, because there are plentiful casinos on the Gulf Coast and USM has a campus in Gulfport. I believe that an internship is tourism management would be easier, since there are many hotel/casinos in the Gulf Coast area.
1. What are you writing? I am writing persuasive argument to interest people in tourism/management.
2. What prompts you to write? It was assigned to me in class.
3. What outcome do you desire? For students to become interested in Tourism
4. What outcome does your reader desire? To decide whether or/not to join USM
1. Who is your primary reader? People that may have worked with casino and want bachelors for upward mobility, or some people interested in the field may know very little.
2. What is your reader’s relationship to you? They may or may not be interested in the subject of tourism.
3. What are your reader’s job title and responsibilities? Students interested in Tourism.
4. Who else might read your communication? Anyone in the southeast interested in Tourism.
5. How familiar is your reader with your subject? May have worked in casinos and wanted a bachelor’s degree for upward mobility or may know nothing.
6. How familiar is your reader with your specialty? May or may not be knowledge in the subject of Tourism.
7. Does your reader have any communication preferences you should take
into account? I would make my brochure flashy, to represent the fun and excitement of a tourism career.
8. Should you take into account any other things about your reader when
writing? I would highlight key points in the brochure to keep them entertained.
1. What are the key questions your reader will ask while reading? Is it entertaining? Does it catch my eye? Is tourism something that will be a fun career?
2. How will your reader search for the answer? Information could be found on the website or the brochure.
3. How will your reader use the information you provide? The purpose would be to compare university tourism/management programs.
1. What is your reader’s attitude toward your subject? I would like them to be persuaded to choose tourism as their major.
2. What is your reader’s attitude toward you? I’d like for my readers to think that tourism is a great major and career.
1. Who, besides your readers, are stakeholders in your communication? Perspective students
2. How will they be affected by it? My brochure may influence readers to choose USM for tourism.
1. What expectations, regulations, or other factors limit the way you can
write? I will provide only information in my brochure to attract students to Tourism at USM.
Florida International University seemed like it would be a great school to attend, as it is accredited and is one of the highest rated schools in America, also offering impressive ideas on how its hospitality and tourism management department is ran. While FIU offers these things, USM has a lot more to offer its students. FIU tuition for in state was $2,551 a semester and out of state tuition was $8,750. The prices for USM are not that much cheaper ($2,726 and out of state is $6,704), but the out of state tuition a Mississippi resident would have to pay to attend FIU is a much larger sum to pay.
If you are a resident of MS, USM would be the better choice, given the amount of out of state tuition one would pay to attend FIU. USM for a MS resident would be around $6000 cheaper than going out of state to FIU. FIU’s main focus is on the tourism/management of cruise ships and hotels, whereas USM focuses more on casinos and hotel management.
USM is a great school to attend if your main interest is on casino management, because there are plentiful casinos on the Gulf Coast and USM has a campus in Gulfport. I believe that an internship is tourism management would be easier, since there are many hotel/casinos in the Gulf Coast area.
1. What are you writing? I am writing persuasive argument to interest people in tourism/management.
2. What prompts you to write? It was assigned to me in class.
3. What outcome do you desire? For students to become interested in Tourism
4. What outcome does your reader desire? To decide whether or/not to join USM
1. Who is your primary reader? People that may have worked with casino and want bachelors for upward mobility, or some people interested in the field may know very little.
2. What is your reader’s relationship to you? They may or may not be interested in the subject of tourism.
3. What are your reader’s job title and responsibilities? Students interested in Tourism.
4. Who else might read your communication? Anyone in the southeast interested in Tourism.
5. How familiar is your reader with your subject? May have worked in casinos and wanted a bachelor’s degree for upward mobility or may know nothing.
6. How familiar is your reader with your specialty? May or may not be knowledge in the subject of Tourism.
7. Does your reader have any communication preferences you should take
into account? I would make my brochure flashy, to represent the fun and excitement of a tourism career.
8. Should you take into account any other things about your reader when
writing? I would highlight key points in the brochure to keep them entertained.
1. What are the key questions your reader will ask while reading? Is it entertaining? Does it catch my eye? Is tourism something that will be a fun career?
2. How will your reader search for the answer? Information could be found on the website or the brochure.
3. How will your reader use the information you provide? The purpose would be to compare university tourism/management programs.
1. What is your reader’s attitude toward your subject? I would like them to be persuaded to choose tourism as their major.
2. What is your reader’s attitude toward you? I’d like for my readers to think that tourism is a great major and career.
1. Who, besides your readers, are stakeholders in your communication? Perspective students
2. How will they be affected by it? My brochure may influence readers to choose USM for tourism.
1. What expectations, regulations, or other factors limit the way you can
write? I will provide only information in my brochure to attract students to Tourism at USM.
Sunday, August 29, 2010
Rhetorical Analysis of "New Orleans Tourism Stronger Than Before"
I found this article online on CNBC website named, "New Orleans Tourism Stronger Than Before",by Steven Perry the President and CEO in New Orleans of the Metropolitan Convention and Visitors Bureau,( http://www.cnbc.com/id/38883168 ) which is based strongly on my major of Tourism. The article is about how much stronger tourism has gotten in New Orleans since Hurricane Katrina. The author has proved a boost in tourism by providing statistical data for post Katrina experiences. New Orleans visitor experience has improved by fixing up the Superdome, Metropolitan Convention Center, hotels and adding hundreds of new restaurants. Events such as festivals, convention meetings and special events have been on the rise. The number of people whom have traveled to New Orleans from 2006 to 2009 has doubled. One recent concern is that New Orleans has had to deal the gulf oil spill, but like Hurricane Katrina, the city knows how to deal with these kinds of threats to their city and tourism.
The context of the issues the writer seems to be is as a New Orleans native no matter what hurricane and/or disaster comes to the city it will prevail in rebuilding and bringing in tourism. What I know about this topic is that I lived through Hurricane Katrina and lived close to New Orleans. I believe the author chose to write this piece on August 27,2010 to remind people of the 5Th year anniversary of Hurricane Katrina and what great strives New Orleans has made since then. If there would be anything at stake for New Orleans it would be to fail to keep growing and bringing in tourism.
Steven Perry is more than knowledge in the Tourism department taking he is the CEO of the New Orleans Metropolitan Convention and Visitors Bureau. "Perry is also Chairman of the Board of Destination Marketing Association International, Executive Committee Member of the US Travel Association and Member of the United States Travel and Tourism Advisory Board which advises the US Secretary of Commerce."(Perry 2010)
The publication of this article is on the CNBC website, which tells me that it is geared toward an audience interested in the national news. The author is reputable because of his job title as the CEO of the New Orleans Metropolitan Convention and Visitors Bureau, because he has this information at his disposal. The author does not posit a political slant, just makes a statement that New Orleans is a city that will flourish, even in the wake of disaster.
I believe that the call to write is the recent oil spill in the Gulf of Mexico. New Orleans is suffering from the oil spill, which is the second devastating disaster that has hit Louisiana within a few years. The oil spill probably surfaced many feelings of despair from five years prior, with Hurricane Katrina, which prompted the author to write an article proving that New Orleans will rebuild no matter how large of a disaster the city will have to face.
The author's intended purpose is to prove to the public that New Orleans will always remain a city that people will forever be interested in visiting. New Orleans is a city like no other in the world and will always draw tourism. The author provides statistical economic data on how tourism has flourished since Hurricane Katrina, proving that his intended purpose is to prove that no matter what the disaster, New Orleans will remain strong.
The intended audience is not targeted toward one group of people. I believe that the article is intended for anyone who is interested in the economy of New Orleans and how it has bounced back from previous and current disasters. The assumption of the author is that people think Katrina and the Gulf Oil Spill have affected the amount of tourism brought to New Orleans, and the author is proving them wrong with statistics showing that tourism has in fact boosted since even before Hurricane Katrina. The author is from New Orleans and has an obvious affection for this great city. The author wants the world to know that New Orleans may have faced some setbacks, but proves with his statistics on the improvement in tourism since Katrina, that even the oil spill will not discourage visitors.
The author uses language in an informative tool. The author does not use any particular slang nor does he write with a scholarly vocabulary. The author's tone is one of an informative nature. He just wishes to portray New Orleans as a thriving city and wants to use data to prove it. The author uses vocabulary that the general public will understand. He wants to inform the public, not to use a large vocabulary that may deter some people from the article. The author is simply writing this article to inform the public of what they may not know. The author uses general language that he assumes most people can understand, intending on having readers from many backgrounds.
The context of the issues the writer seems to be is as a New Orleans native no matter what hurricane and/or disaster comes to the city it will prevail in rebuilding and bringing in tourism. What I know about this topic is that I lived through Hurricane Katrina and lived close to New Orleans. I believe the author chose to write this piece on August 27,2010 to remind people of the 5Th year anniversary of Hurricane Katrina and what great strives New Orleans has made since then. If there would be anything at stake for New Orleans it would be to fail to keep growing and bringing in tourism.
Steven Perry is more than knowledge in the Tourism department taking he is the CEO of the New Orleans Metropolitan Convention and Visitors Bureau. "Perry is also Chairman of the Board of Destination Marketing Association International, Executive Committee Member of the US Travel Association and Member of the United States Travel and Tourism Advisory Board which advises the US Secretary of Commerce."(Perry 2010)
The publication of this article is on the CNBC website, which tells me that it is geared toward an audience interested in the national news. The author is reputable because of his job title as the CEO of the New Orleans Metropolitan Convention and Visitors Bureau, because he has this information at his disposal. The author does not posit a political slant, just makes a statement that New Orleans is a city that will flourish, even in the wake of disaster.
I believe that the call to write is the recent oil spill in the Gulf of Mexico. New Orleans is suffering from the oil spill, which is the second devastating disaster that has hit Louisiana within a few years. The oil spill probably surfaced many feelings of despair from five years prior, with Hurricane Katrina, which prompted the author to write an article proving that New Orleans will rebuild no matter how large of a disaster the city will have to face.
The author's intended purpose is to prove to the public that New Orleans will always remain a city that people will forever be interested in visiting. New Orleans is a city like no other in the world and will always draw tourism. The author provides statistical economic data on how tourism has flourished since Hurricane Katrina, proving that his intended purpose is to prove that no matter what the disaster, New Orleans will remain strong.
The intended audience is not targeted toward one group of people. I believe that the article is intended for anyone who is interested in the economy of New Orleans and how it has bounced back from previous and current disasters. The assumption of the author is that people think Katrina and the Gulf Oil Spill have affected the amount of tourism brought to New Orleans, and the author is proving them wrong with statistics showing that tourism has in fact boosted since even before Hurricane Katrina. The author is from New Orleans and has an obvious affection for this great city. The author wants the world to know that New Orleans may have faced some setbacks, but proves with his statistics on the improvement in tourism since Katrina, that even the oil spill will not discourage visitors.
The author uses language in an informative tool. The author does not use any particular slang nor does he write with a scholarly vocabulary. The author's tone is one of an informative nature. He just wishes to portray New Orleans as a thriving city and wants to use data to prove it. The author uses vocabulary that the general public will understand. He wants to inform the public, not to use a large vocabulary that may deter some people from the article. The author is simply writing this article to inform the public of what they may not know. The author uses general language that he assumes most people can understand, intending on having readers from many backgrounds.
Monday, August 23, 2010
David Guaqueta
Hello my name is David Guaqueta and I am a Tourism major. When I graduate I would like to get a job at a resort, cruise liner, or casino in management. I am currently working at a restaurant as a cook and occasional kitchen manager. Being an hourly manager has really helped me understand how to manage people in the work place. I have been working in the restaurant business for a decade and can't wait to graduate to start my career. I am ready to move up in management and i believe that having a degree will help me to be more successful within my field.
I have one brother, two sisters and family all over the world. My parents are from two separate worlds;my mother grew up here in the United States and my father in Colombia, South America. As a kid and into adulthood I have traveled between the two countries and it has really made me love discovering new places and cultures. I have lived in Aruba (in the Carribbean), backpacked through Europe and traveled Central America and South America. I grew up loving to travel and meeting new people and that is why I chose to go into the major of Tourism.
I hope from taking this course I will gain a much more professional writing style. Each year I have been in college it has really helped. I am currently a Junior in college and will graduate in December, 2012. During the next year and a half, I plan to work hard on my studies and hopefully even this class will help me accomplish my goals. I can not wait to graduate and finally pursue the career of my dreams.
I have one brother, two sisters and family all over the world. My parents are from two separate worlds;my mother grew up here in the United States and my father in Colombia, South America. As a kid and into adulthood I have traveled between the two countries and it has really made me love discovering new places and cultures. I have lived in Aruba (in the Carribbean), backpacked through Europe and traveled Central America and South America. I grew up loving to travel and meeting new people and that is why I chose to go into the major of Tourism.
I hope from taking this course I will gain a much more professional writing style. Each year I have been in college it has really helped. I am currently a Junior in college and will graduate in December, 2012. During the next year and a half, I plan to work hard on my studies and hopefully even this class will help me accomplish my goals. I can not wait to graduate and finally pursue the career of my dreams.
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